blog#5

Writing center internship

This week for the tutoring internship in the writing center one person had come in wanting  help on their paper a couple hours before it was due. It was a short length paper and the only thing that was wrong with it was organization. The writing tutor had suggested that by adding a thesis and conclusion it would round up the paper better and would have a better organizational flow. He also suggested that the person read the paper out loud or have someone else read the paper to catch grammar errors.

Chapter 5

In chapter five it talks about  how in normal conversation we hedge are words and predictions to soften the blow. With words like sort of, kinda, maybe.  These are not used in college writing and makes the paper  more forceful.  When they are needed there is informal and formal “the judge was somewhat irritated.” Is formal but can be replaced with words like irritated or furious.

Hedging also acts as a throat clearer and muddies up the water with uncertainty. By removing words like may, seem,  or can. Will clear up the writing.  Another thing is overstating the claim that we are over confident in the claim and overstate the argument and bring in skepticism. Not to be confused with supporting information. This chapter was mainly based on making a writer less timid in his or her writing.

Revision

·         And this space can vary from a small patch of forest to regional scaling

·         And this space varies from a small patch of forest to regional scaling.

I removed the word “can” to un-hedge the sentence to remove imprecise writing.

·         , but as you move from a regional scale to a finer scale the inner-patch variation can be noticed. “

·         , but as you move from a regional scale to a finer scale the inner-patch variation will be noticed. “

the can I noticed is used a lot in my writing and that is the only hedge word that I’m finding in my writing.  So I replaced it with “will” to make it a more compelling argument.