blog#11

this week for the writting internship we looked at a paper for a ploy sciencence class on the iraq war. thier was alot of gramer issues and puntuation errors. the only thing that needed to be fixed structure wise was putting the thesis in the first paragraph becouse it was located deeper in the paper originaly.



part 2

Our Brief History

Georgia Martinell, founder, worked for several years in animal shelters and private veterinary clinics all over the West Coast.  In 2006, she moved to a rural Northern Idaho town and realized a  need for action:  With no other animal rescue groups in the immediate area, the stray population was large and people had nowhere to go for low-cost spaying and neutering services.  

. A[BB1]  Board of Directors was formed and Second Chance Animal, Inc. was made into a legitimate 501 (c) 3 non-profit organization[BB2] . .

To date we have helped more than 560 animals in need, supplied over 55 dog houses to those with no shelter.  We have given away thousands of pounds of kibble to hungry pets.  This was all done in the last 3 years with less than 20 volunteers[BB3] [BB4] .

From second chance animal web site with some revision

About Us[BB5] 

Second Chance Animal, Inc.  committed to promoting the humane treatment of animals, preventing animal cruelty, and ending over-p[BB6] opulation of domestic pets . We’re striving to reach this goal by educating the public on the importance of responsible pet ownership and preventing the next generation of homeless pets.

EVERY animal deserves a good life and a loving home. With the support of the community, we have already helped thousands [BB7] of pets in our local area. We hope, with continued support, we will be able to grow and fight for all [BB8]  animals.

Our mission is to improve the lives of all animals[BB9] , end domestic pet  over-population, have an aggressive spay/neuter program, and compassionate stewardship of resources[BB10] .

We depend on volunteers and donations to maintain our funding and help us end animal suffering.

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blog#10

This week I did not attend the weekly writing internship due to other obligations. But here is what I’ve been working on for the tri fold.

Our History

Georgia Martinell, founder, worked for several years in animal shelters and private veterinary clinics all over the West Coast.  In 2006, she moved to a rural Northern Idaho town and realized a the extreme need for action.  With no other animal rescue groups in the immediate area, the stray population was large and people had nowhere to go for low-cost spaying and neutering services.  

Georgia started holding yard sales to earn extra money, so she could help out.  As people heard about these new animal programs and services, more and more families started providing assistance. A Board of Directors was formed and Second Chance Animal, Inc. was made into a legitimate 501 (c) 3 non-profit organization.  Fundraising efforts got a boost, and a thrift store was opened to create more revenue for the charity in 2009. The thift store was sold recently and is no longer bringing in revenue so donations help more than ever now.

To date we have helped more than 560 animals in need, supplied over 55 dog houses to those with no shelter.  We have given away thousands of pounds of kibble to hungry pets.  This was all done in the last 3 years with less than 20 volunteers.

From second chance animal web site with some revision

About Us

Second Chance Animal, Inc. is a 501 (c) 3 non-profit committed to promoting the humane treatment of animals, preventing animal cruelty, and ending over population of domestic pets over-population. We’re striving to reach this goal by educating the public on the importance of responsible pet ownership and preventing the next generation of homeless pets.

EVERY animal deserves a good life and a loving home. With the support of the community, we have already been able to  helped thousands of pets in our local area. We hope, with continued support, we will be able to grow and fight for all for a better world for all animals.

Our mission is to improve the lives of all animals and end domestic pet  over-population, an aggressive spay/neuter program, and compassionate stewardship of resources.

We depend on volunteers and donations to maintain our funding and help us end animal suffering.

Review

So far these two sections seem to work well for telling the goals of second chance animals and the background information of the company. Although the two sections, history and about us. Are overlapping in information a bit; to me anyways.  another thing is that text  from the web site that was  copied over to the tri fold had some outdated info like the thrift shop making profit even though its sold. For revisions mostly was order of wording that needing changing to make it sound better.

blog#9

Part 1

This week for the writing center internship I helped on a paper involving grammar correction and word placement, he had the right words they were just out of order. Also gave input on how to connect sentences together so that they would flow together and connect to the prior sentence. This writer was multilingual so I think the grammar and word placement issues were correlated to that because I’ve heard English is a difficult second language with all of the different grammar and writing rules.

Part 2

So far I’ve mostly have worked on getting the pictures together and using Photoshop to fit them  for the tri-fold. But as a group the majority of the writing has come off of the web site. With that said I think over spring break I might take an hour and go over the writing and edit for content to better suit the tri-fold.  Questions for Georgia would be what format she wants or colors or organization/ placement of topics on the tri-fold.