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Part 1

This week for the writing center a guy came in needing help making a paper reach the page requirement.  The tutoring process involved showing areas where more detail could be put in, along with adding a better intro and conclusion to help organize the paper and add length.  This kind of deals what with we have talked about in class by the organization of a paper and its flow; from chapter 6, with every sentence being consecutive.  Its good to see other writers with this problem because this topic of organization is my weak point, and seeing other writing helps on how I can fix my own papers.

Part two

 In class our group figured out that the educational tri fold will have to include: who second chance animal is? What they do? Address spaying and neutering.  Free dog food where and how it can be obtained. The audience is pet and non-pet owners.  Have their logo on the front page with all their contact info on the back of the tri-fold; face book, twitter, website ect. Then put the topics mentioned above in the middle to fill the space. For dividing up the writing between the group we decided we should each take a topic and go from there. Then combine it all into the tri-fold. Things we need to do are get the old pamphlet and pictures along with doing some research on the topics.

blog#7

Part 1

This week in the writing center internship one person came in needing help with grammar, English was their second language so a lot of the sentences were backwards or mildly out of place kind of how yota from star wars spoke. Also helped them with past and present tense. along with conecting sentecnces.

Part 2

As an audience member for the next writing project I like animals but don’t own any myself and am more of a dog person over cats. The current media materials I found to be most effective are the digital media like face book and twitter because everyone seems to be glued to their computer or smart phone these days . some places for revision could be radio or television or actual people and animals fundraising out in public. Some questions that could be asked, who is main audience? What is the main message you want to convey? The thing I hope to get out of this is to widen my writing experience because mostly my writing has been for school papers or projects.

Part 3

Chapter six talks about making connections in your writing; so that a paper will flow and connect to the previous sentence. Otherwise a paragraph is just a jumbled mass of sentences. If a paragraph is torn apart it should be able to be put back together in order, from the use of those connections between sentences. This is important in writing because unlike speaking; the reader of a piece of writing cant ask questions to fill in the gaps.

For this week’s revision I chose to focus on the use of colons and semi colons

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Writing center

This week for the writing internship a girl needed help with grammar. The major things were, improper use of past tense and present tense. Along with plurals being placed in wrong areas. The other thing was format for journal article citation.  This seemed to be something the writing center doesn’t do, fixing grammar, but I guess they made an exception.

Part 2

This was a piece from a assignment in landscape ecology

Landscape ecology has many different aspects to it; the most important aspect of landscape is the linking of patterns and space. The spatial context is important in the function of habitat and dispersal of organisms due to the fact that, fragmented habitats are restricted  with things like edge effect- even if there is a vast amount of land- because of distance between sections of land.  Another part of landscape ecology is heterogeneity, at some scale of the landscape each section is homogeneous and make up the heterogeneous landscape; similar to that of a mosaic. Patterns are created and repeated within intervals of acres to hectares. Heterogeneity is changed by and made up of different factors; which include biota, human activities, disturbances and geographical templates. These factors influence one another and are all intertwined affecting the heterogeneity. To sum it up “landscape ecology is the study of the entire complex cause-effect network between the living communities and their environmental conditions which prevails in a specific section of the landscape..[and] becomes apparent in a specific landscape pattern or in a natural; space classification of the different orders of size” –Carl Troll (1939).  Landscape has structure which includes: patch, ecotone, edge, matrix, corridor , and pattern. These patterns make up the landscape and differentiate the area.   Processes in landscape are disturbance, fragmentation, percolation, and linkages. The processes are the factors that change the structure of the landscape.  Reciprocality occurs through cause and effect between the processes and spatial patterns   

I didn’t see many spots where the sentences didn’t logically connect , all seemed to flow into one another with conncetions. But it may be because this is a subject that I kno in my major and could be mentally filling in the gaps in my head while reading this paper

Part 3

Chapter six talks about making connections in your writing; so that a paper will flow and connect to the previous sentence. Otherwise a paragraph is just a jumbled mass of sentences. If a paragraph is torn apart is should be able to be put back together in order, from the use of those connections between sentences. This is important in writing because unlike speaking the reader of a piece of writing cant ask questions to fill in the gaps.

The anti paragraph as the book refers to it is something that has no transition or connection between sentences. There are a few ways to fix this, first adding new and given information. Add ne information to the first sentence then tie the next one back to the first by using given information. Another way to achieve this task of connection is to use nominalization.  To do this reverse the process of converting nouns to verbs to animate the sentence. Then use the verb in the following sentence to give cohesion between sentences.  The third way is to use antecedents which are word like he, her, that.  This ties sentences together without using the same word over, just referencing the previous object or person.

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Writing center internship

This week for the tutoring internship in the writing center one person had come in wanting  help on their paper a couple hours before it was due. It was a short length paper and the only thing that was wrong with it was organization. The writing tutor had suggested that by adding a thesis and conclusion it would round up the paper better and would have a better organizational flow. He also suggested that the person read the paper out loud or have someone else read the paper to catch grammar errors.

Chapter 5

In chapter five it talks about  how in normal conversation we hedge are words and predictions to soften the blow. With words like sort of, kinda, maybe.  These are not used in college writing and makes the paper  more forceful.  When they are needed there is informal and formal “the judge was somewhat irritated.” Is formal but can be replaced with words like irritated or furious.

Hedging also acts as a throat clearer and muddies up the water with uncertainty. By removing words like may, seem,  or can. Will clear up the writing.  Another thing is overstating the claim that we are over confident in the claim and overstate the argument and bring in skepticism. Not to be confused with supporting information. This chapter was mainly based on making a writer less timid in his or her writing.

Revision

·         And this space can vary from a small patch of forest to regional scaling

·         And this space varies from a small patch of forest to regional scaling.

I removed the word “can” to un-hedge the sentence to remove imprecise writing.

·         , but as you move from a regional scale to a finer scale the inner-patch variation can be noticed. “

·         , but as you move from a regional scale to a finer scale the inner-patch variation will be noticed. “

the can I noticed is used a lot in my writing and that is the only hedge word that I’m finding in my writing.  So I replaced it with “will” to make it a more compelling argument.