Writing center
This week in the writing center two people came in wanting a seconded set of eyes to look over their paper neither person had any major or critical errors in their paper just minor things that would affect the read. But they were more of just surface error type. One just needed to break up the paper by adding paragraphs at natural breaks and the other only had minor grammar errors. The tutors only offered changes to style not content.
Reading response
The difference between passive and active voice is that active has a simple for of the verb and is more direct while passive is a past tense mixed with the verb.
The section of writing is from a landscape ecology class:
“Spatial scale is very important concept in landscape ecology. It is the magnitude at which we view a piece of land. Also scale is distinguished by grain and extent. The grain is the finest scale available and extent is the size of the study area. There are two varieties to scale, temporal and spatial scale. Temporal being a place viewed over an amount of geological time. For example seasons, decades, or centuries. The second type of scale and the focus of this paper is spatial scale which is distinguished by three dimensional spaces. And this space can vary from a small patch of forest to regional scaling. In the instance of land sat images the finest scale is the individual pixel which is 30 meters by 30 meters. At this finest scale the landscape is homogenous. It’s not until the picture is zoomed out that patterns and heterogeneity can be seen. In the instance of large scale landscape the variety in pattern will be less because the patches are larger, but as you move from a regional scale to a finer scale the inner-patch variation can be noticed. “
This piece is active writing and fits well in my opinion because none of the facts represented in the paper or in the field of landscape ecology are old out of date things. They are currently happening. Also there is less confusion when using active form sentences.
Revision
· Transitive verbs are those that need complements within the sentence
· Complements that support a verb are transitive
From active to passive
· The modifiers were removed.
· Modifiers can be cut if a sentence becomes too wordy
From passive to active
I thought the piece of work you chose to represet chapter 4 was great! It worked because like you said it was all happening in the now.
ReplyDeleteYour revisions were great also! Why did you choose those sentences to revise? And just curious why under them it says from passive to active?
Kyle,
ReplyDeleteYour reading responses so far are quite nice and have a lot of specific detail, so keep up the good work there. For your WC Internship Reflection, think about what additional details you could include. For example, what minor grammar errors did they have? Were these concepts ones that you already knew? Anything that would apply to your writing/revision?
I'll second Taylor's question asking why you wrote "Form passive to active" at the bottom. Currently, your last two sentences are in the passive voice as the agent (you or another writer) is absent from the sentence. To make them active, you could write the following:
I removed the modifers.
We can cut modifiers if a sentence becomes too wordy.
Of course, revising the sentences into the active voice places the emphasis on the person rather than the object--which you might not want.
Finally, I wanted to point out your excellent use of the colon in Blog 3:
The book has three things to look for when making revisions: do we have the right verb? Are the complements compatible with it? Do the modifiers add anything important?
Questions and a colon--nice!
Beth
to answer the question of why i wrote passive to active under the revisons. i coppied and pasted from a word doccument that i wrote the blog in and i think i had those as a remider to myself as the type of revison,for refrence, but copied it into the blog along with the post. as for the sentences i chose to revise. i picked them at random to just work on switching between actve and passive form.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you revised your past work, they sound much better. I also am curious on why you wrote from passive to active?
ReplyDeleteGreat job continuing chapter four and stating it being an active piece of writing.
So far my writing center time has been basically the same. People just come in with small errors that they want checked out, but I'm sure we will have some papers that need to be seriously re-worked in the future. Good job with your revisions, active and passive voices are definitely a lot trickier than I thought they would be.
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